Scene Eight – “Brother's Keeper”

From The First Fall – A Musical Origin of Humanity

Setting

The night still bleeds from the horizon. The field where Abel fell lies shrouded in smoke and ash. The Girl kneels beside her wounded father, while faint tremors echo from the distance. Out of the haze comes Cain — his body heavy with rage, his staff raised. From the opposite rise, Jack Righteous appears, quiet but resolute, eyes fixed on the man he must face. Between them, the earth remembers.

No words are spoken. The Girl gathers her family and begins to retreat through the smoke. Jack steps forward — guided by the same whisper that once spoke through Abel. Cain advances, unaware that his fate is already written in the dust.

Song – “Brother's Keeper”

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[Verse 1 – The Weight of the Ground] Smoke hang low where Abel fell, Dust remember — it breathe so well. Jack stand small, but light surround, The same soft glow dat haunt this ground. He feel a warmth — not sun, not flame, A whisper call him Abel’s name. Through love, through loss, through heart undone, He face a first-born, a father’s son. [Verse 2 – The Silent Stand] Cain step near — his eyes all fire, Heart still pounding with old desire. No word between, no curse, no plea, Just breath and fate in symmetry. Jack plant hoof, no fear, no run, The girl behind — her life begun. He bow his head — not to yield, But to guard the soul he’s sworn to shield. [Confrontation – The Clash] [drums strike] Steel flash quick, dust leap high, Ash and echo fill the sky. Jack charge once — no second chance, A spark ignite in Cain’s wide stance. Abel’s hum move through the air, A sound of mercy, pain, and prayer. The blow come down — time hold its breath, Love meet fury, life meet death. [music drop] [Instrumental – Stillness of the Field] The field glow red beneath the morn, Two shadows fade — one reborn. [Verse 3 – Aftermath / Realization] Cain stare long — his chest still flame, But none remain to take the blame. He turn — the camp, the path, the dust… All gone. Just silence, just trust. He look once more — the ground still warm, The echo of hooves his only form. He kneel — not prayer, not plea, Just lost inside what used to be. [Cain – Spoken Line] “Am I… my brother’s keeper?” [Final Verse – The Vow of Exile] He wipe the blood — it stain remain, No home to go, no one to name. He whisper low to earth below, “Mi walk alone — dat’s all mi know.” The fire dim, di shadow grow, The seed of man through sorrow sow. He take his staff, he face the plain, And vow neva walk dis ground again. [Refrain – Ensemble Echo / Cain Alone] From dust to dust, from flame to flame, Each keeper bear di weight of name. Mi brother’s keeper? Maybe so. Mi carry both — where mi must go. No peace, no rest, just road and pain, The mark remain — di mark remain. 

Staging During Song

The scene unfolds in silence at first. Jack positions himself between Cain and the Girl. Dust swirls like ghosts as the drums begin. Each clash is a heartbeat, echoing Abel’s spirit. When Abel’s melody hums faintly in the air, Jack strikes — not in hate, but in love. The Girl escapes with her family while the two forces collide, light against fire. When the music fades, Jack lies still — and Cain realizes what he’s lost. His question cuts the silence: “Am I my brother’s keeper?”

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Cain stands alone. The dawn breaks weak over the field. Smoke trails rise where hope once lived. He takes his staff, looks toward the horizon, and walks into exile. Behind him, the earth hums softly — Abel, Jack, and the weight of all who loved.

Next: Scene Nine — “Blood in the Sand”

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🔥 Official Scene Guide

1. Scene 1 – “Let’s Go My People”
2. Scene 2 – “I Will Protect Her”
3. Scene 3 – “Mi Nuh Born Fi Bow”
4. Scene 4 – “Just One Bite”
5. Scene 5 – “You Rock, You Run”
6. Scene 6 – “Fire Ah Come”
7. Scene 7 – “Murderrah”
8. Scene 8 – “Brother’s Keeper”
9. Scene 9 – “Blood in the Sand”
10. Scene 10 – “Human Error (The Creed of Haillion)”
11. Scene 11 – “Righteous Music Whole”
12. Scene 12 – “The King Is Dead [Long Live the New King]”

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